The Last Breath

Don't breathe......



     She laid there in darkness, trying to catch her breath. The dark was so total, it felt as if a suffocating shroud had engulfed her and was now pulling the very breath from her lungs. The concrete floor of the basement was cold, and she shivered, but, her terrified mind refused to let her notice the chill. She tried to move her leg, but it was too difficult. Her blood, which now covered her face, was like a plasmatic paste bonding her right eye shut. As she continued to breathe deeply, she whimpered and then wept.

     In another obscure corner of the darkness, crouched the creature. Silently it waited as it took in the air through it’s flared nostrils and sampled it one molecule at a time. It’s prey was out there in the blackness....alone....bloodied and weak. The beast had sampled it’s quarry’s blood, and the taste still lingered in the back of it’s throat....and it quivered with anticipation.

     She tried to crawl, but her right hip had been shattered and the blood loss from the gaping wound in her neck left her weak and unable to move. She now waited for the inevitable. Mother was with her siblings, safe and unaware of what had happened to her. She had been down to the basement before, but always with mother. Her mother would quickly search for something of necessity, and then they would return upstairs again. It was exciting and mysterious and the chance to explore this strange and forbidding place was simply too appealing for her. Today, as her mother napped, she descended to this lower domain to explore and nourish her curiosity. But, in concealment, terror was waiting.

     The predator slowly crept across the basement floor as silent as a night’s fog. Stopping, twisting it’s massive head from side to side, it listened. Then it lifted it’s head and deeply inhaled the dank air. Then....in the dark....it heard breathing! Slight, weak, but, most definitely there.

     She laid in a solitude of fear, while her pain numbed her senses. Then, suddenly, she could smell the pungent vapor of it’s musty hide, and out of the swirling abyss of the blackness, she saw the gleaming eyes of the beast and of her own demise. It was quick, silent and final. Then the door at the top of the stairs suddenly opened emitting a flash of defused light that radiated most of the basement in a surreal glow. The creature quickly studied it’s kill for a moment, and then took it up in it’s maw and raced towards the bottom of the stairs and then stopped. Slowly, it ascended the stair case, and then, there came a startled cry.........“Holy crap, Tab just caught another one!”



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Comments (20)

  1. funfreak

    OH! Ya got me! This was GREAT!

    August 24, 2014
    1. uncle_charlie

      Thanks love.

      August 25, 2014
  2. WalkinOnSunshine

    Omgoodness I loved this!

    August 24, 2014
    1. uncle_charlie

      Poor mousey.

      August 25, 2014
  3. Bettymom

    Poor Mousie.

    August 25, 2014
    1. uncle_charlie

      I felt really bad about what happened.

      August 25, 2014
      1. Bettymom

        Suuuuure you did.

        August 25, 2014
  4. cjb321

    Very scary….for the poor little creature. lol

    August 25, 2014
    1. uncle_charlie

      The food chain never changes.

      August 25, 2014
  5. pastormike

    my son adopted a stray cat when he lived in Vancover, Wa.. it had been living in a Junkyard. tough neighborhood. then they moved to Pullman Washington for school and found a place on the edge of a big wheatfield. and Gato proceeded to bring in 60 odd mice the first week. he must have thought he’d died and gone to heaven…

    August 25, 2014
    1. uncle_charlie

      Most fields are like a rodent smorgasbord.

      August 26, 2014
      1. pastormike

        and all the dogs in the subdivision had to be fenced. he must have figured he’d been a very good cat..

        August 26, 2014
  6. sweetpaws

    hahahaha you got me for sure

    August 25, 2014
    1. uncle_charlie

      Always a pleasure when it works.

      August 26, 2014
  7. TinkerHale

    I’ll never go in another basement again! You got me good with this one…Nicely done albeit you scared me yet again…lol

    August 26, 2014
    1. uncle_charlie

      Then I done gooood.

      August 26, 2014
      1. TinkerHale

        You sure did, uncle_charlie.

        August 26, 2014
  8. timholzbaur

    Nicely done! You always surprise us in the end.

    August 27, 2014
  9. uncle_charlie

    Why sure!!

    August 26, 2014